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RP improvements.

PostPosted: Tue Jan 02, 2018 11:27 pm
by Meliva
After hearing what several other players had issues with the RP's, i decided to make this topic so that everyone can discuss changes and rule suggestions to future RP's to help more people feel welcome to participate and help improve the fun everyone has when Roleplaying.
Just 2 things to keep in mind here.
Be polite and civil-its really not that hard to do.
Don't just complain-give constructive criticism.

Re: RP improvements.

PostPosted: Tue Jan 02, 2018 11:34 pm
by Grimrock Litless
I dislike the fact that you use a lot of useless words in your story.

You tried to described a character in the story and did a terrible job at it, who cares if someone have a pocket watch or whatever if it is never gonna get used in the story.

Also, spacing, there is a reason why so many books uses them, after each speech and action. And in between speeches between characters.

I am not writer, or am I someone who reads a lot, but it doesn't take a genius to replicate the things book writers used.

If you really wanna go to the extreme with it, you can even add colours for all the different characters talking.

Re: RP improvements.

PostPosted: Tue Jan 02, 2018 11:35 pm
by Jack Teach
Grimrock Litless wrote:I dislike the fact that you use a lot of useless words in your story.

You tried to described a character in the story and did a terrible job at it, who cares if someone have a pocket watch or whatever if it is never gonna get used in the story.

Also, spacing, there is a reason why so many books uses them, after each speech and action. And in between speeches between characters.

I am not writer, or am I someone who reads a lot, but it doesn't take a genius to replicate the things book writers used.

Some people like to describe little details.

Re: RP improvements.

PostPosted: Tue Jan 02, 2018 11:39 pm
by Grimrock Litless
Jack Teach wrote:
Grimrock Litless wrote:I dislike the fact that you use a lot of useless words in your story.

You tried to described a character in the story and did a terrible job at it, who cares if someone have a pocket watch or whatever if it is never gonna get used in the story.

Also, spacing, there is a reason why so many books uses them, after each speech and action. And in between speeches between characters.

I am not writer, or am I someone who reads a lot, but it doesn't take a genius to replicate the things book writers used.

Some people like to describe little details.


If I wanted to read a wall of text, I would go and read Terms and Conditions of products and such.

Re: RP improvements.

PostPosted: Tue Jan 02, 2018 11:54 pm
by DezNutz
If you go back to the RP I started, I provided all the sufficient rules to include spacing. Slowing the pace down comes down to the players posting. When someone posts, read and think through it. Don't just respond, think about it and write. Give details, but don't write a book.

A difference between posting this:

RP EXAMPLE 1 wrote:A man walks into the tavern and orders a drink.



THIS:

RP EXAMPLE 2 wrote:A young man enters the tavern. His brow is dripping with sweat as he looks around the tavern. He walks up to the bartender and says:
I'd like a glass of rum, please. The bartender pours a glass and hands it to the young man and asks him if he is ok. The man nervously responds.
Uhmm..yes, sir. I'm just waiting for a friend. His name is Nelson, you haven't seen him have you?


AND THIS:

RP EXAMPLE 3 wrote:A young man enters the tavern. His brow is dripping with sweat as he looks around the tavern. He walks up to the bartender and says:

I'd like a glass of rum, please.

The bartender pours a glass and hands it to the young man and asks him if he is ok. The man nervously responds.

Uhmm..yes, sir. I'm just waiting for a friend. His name is Nelson, you haven't seen him have you?

Re: RP improvements.

PostPosted: Wed Jan 03, 2018 12:02 am
by Grimrock Litless
Number 3 is beautiful!

RP EXAMPLE 4 wrote:A young man enters the tavern. His brow is dripping with sweat as he looks around the tavern. He walks up to the bartender and says:

I'd like a glass of rum, please.

The bartender pours a glass and hands it to the young man and asks him if he is ok. The man nervously responds.

Uhmm..yes, sir. I'm just waiting for a friend. His name is Nelson, you haven't seen him have you?


This is overkill, but it's even better!

Re: RP improvements.

PostPosted: Wed Jan 03, 2018 12:03 am
by D00T
Grimrock Litless wrote:
Jack Teach wrote:
Grimrock Litless wrote:I dislike the fact that you use a lot of useless words in your story.

You tried to described a character in the story and did a terrible job at it, who cares if someone have a pocket watch or whatever if it is never gonna get used in the story.

Also, spacing, there is a reason why so many books uses them, after each speech and action. And in between speeches between characters.

I am not writer, or am I someone who reads a lot, but it doesn't take a genius to replicate the things book writers used.

Some people like to describe little details.


If I wanted to read a wall of text, I would go and read Terms and Conditions of products and such.

So you are saying that there should be a word limit?Or something else?

Re: RP improvements.

PostPosted: Wed Jan 03, 2018 12:03 am
by Jack Teach
Grimrock Litless wrote:
Jack Teach wrote:
Grimrock Litless wrote:I dislike the fact that you use a lot of useless words in your story.

You tried to described a character in the story and did a terrible job at it, who cares if someone have a pocket watch or whatever if it is never gonna get used in the story.

Also, spacing, there is a reason why so many books uses them, after each speech and action. And in between speeches between characters.

I am not writer, or am I someone who reads a lot, but it doesn't take a genius to replicate the things book writers used.

Some people like to describe little details.


If I wanted to read a wall of text, I would go and read Terms and Conditions of products and such.

If people want to describe little details. this is not just for your enjoyment you know!

Re: RP improvements.

PostPosted: Wed Jan 03, 2018 12:11 am
by DezNutz
Jack Teach wrote:If people want to describe little details. this is not just for your enjoyment you know!


Yes, but details should be relevant to the character. We don't need to know that your character wears pink lace panties and a garter belt underneath his pirate outfit.

Re: RP improvements.

PostPosted: Wed Jan 03, 2018 12:13 am
by Jack Teach
DezNutz wrote:
Jack Teach wrote:If people want to describe little details. this is not just for your enjoyment you know!


Yes, but details should be relevant to the character. We don't need to know that your character wears pink lace panties and a garter belt underneath his pirate outfit.

Aye, you're right there. But I think people should allowed to describe their outward appearance and clothing as much as they like, as long as it's not excessive.